Tell me By Siling-La

By Siling-La
POSTED: 03 Aug 2019 06:33
CATEGORY: Poetry and Lyrics
FEATURED: Yes (banjo2)
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Tell Me
POEM BY Siling-La
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So hey guys, I have really been working on songs alot lately, and I've just been so focused on composing music, that I forgot about my old friend: poetry.

Now, I know what you're going to say: "Songs are just poems with misic.", but still, it doesn't sound the same when you cannot hear the music, so I'm the only one who can really enjoy them to the fullest. So, today (well, tonight), I am going to go back to something everyone can enjoy the fullest just by reading it. Something that flows well when read aloud: a poem. I hope you guys enjoy, and as always, comment! IMHO, this one isn't very good, but I love hearing how I can improve, so yeah. Leave good stuff, leave bad stuff, just leave something. And thank you for patiently reading all of these paragraphs! Here is the poem!

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Can somebody tell me
how half the world can be enslaved
while the other is declared free?

Can anybody tell me
Why it matters that we look different
and why the heart's not what we see?

Is there one who can tell me
why we worry about saving honey bees
but let children die in poverty?

Is there any book that can tell me
Why we may celebrate good times
with tears still on our cheeks?

Who on Earth can tell me
Why we give our time to the elderly
But reject anyone else who sees?

Can the pattern of history tell me
Why every human feels a loss so deep
And a month later, sings?

Can no one tell me?
Does no one know
A single yes
or single no?

Am I left to my own judgement?
Is that humanity's punishment?
It is a curse that enslaves us all
It will do anything to make us fall

This is the curse:
When times seem like they can't be worse
we rely on our own intelligence
We refuse to cross the tiny fence
of just simply asking for help.

Look to to others
Maybe your brothers
even a stranger for advice

Ask anybody to help you
you can't do it on your own.
Because keeping your problems only with you
Is like making an unpayable loan.

You may think you're strong
but we're all weak
No one likes to hear they're wrong
but it is truth I speak

Please my friends
and my readers
as this poem comes to an end
Remember when you can't go one more meter
I'll always be there for you
And your family too
Don't keep your uncertainties between you and you!

JH 2019Â®

+7 -4

Draconid_Jo
17 Aug 2019 04:49

For the Life of my, I cannot understand why this got so many downvotes, as it's all absolutely True.

I would add to that, however, that you CAN share your problems with God, and sometimes, that alone may be enough.

It always helps to share things with Friends too, however, assuming that you have them.
(I could only share my problems with my mom and my sister prior to coming here, and there were always certain things I felt uncomfortable sharing with them.)

Siling-La
17 Aug 2019 06:39
In reply to Draconid_Jo

Hmm. Oh, I understand the downvotes. I'm just going to learn from this blog and pretend it never happened!

I know how uncomfortable that can be. I do not feel comfortable telling most things to my father. He is a great father, but he does not know how to be a dad.

Draconid_Jo
17 Aug 2019 08:10
In reply to Siling-La

Yeah, he sounds a LOT like my dad, really.
(He's probably less violent though, and I doubt he curses all the time like my dad does.)

heaven.is.a.joke
05 Aug 2019 00:36

i only downvoted because I felt that the message was very scattered and unclear. i believe you have a good intention, just only write how you actually feel. the more forced the poem sounds, the less meaningful it will be. like you said, just stay true to yourself and your feelings

Gemini Guardian
05 Aug 2019 15:48
In reply to heaven.is.a.joke

that's what i thought as well.
he was talking about something in the first half
but then changed his message in the second half

Finrod
04 Aug 2019 11:57

Well let me tell you one thing. Your poems and songs are indeed the same. You writing songs are ONLY lyrics, this isn't a music video. Lyrics might as well be poetic. The only person hearing music is yourself because it's in your own head.

Funny part is you literally admitted to this. You were the only one arguing about how your poems and songs are different. And yet you contradicted yourself right there in sentence 2. No hate, but your whole introduction beyond that is pointless.

Siling-La
04 Aug 2019 17:29
In reply to Finrod

I don't think you quite understood that sentence. I meant, that even though my songs are poetic, they can sound a bit unatural, and confusing to the reader because it was written to flow with music. Poems are written to flow well when you read them. Yes, I'll admit that sometimes there is no difference, but most of the time, there is.

Also, I think I know where I went wrong with this poem. It didn't come from my heart. I just wrote good advice, and probably ignored every emotion or feeling I had at that time. I suppose I need to stick with my heart when I write. After all, that is one of the things people can relate to. (almost) Everyone knows how lonliness, pain, joy, and devastation feels, and I think they understand what is going on inside me. They can feel the happiness and the hurt in my poems/songs. So, I'll stick with that.

(And, I know I said my poems were written to flow when read, but I have no idea what happened to this poem! lol. I thought I'd take a chance because some of the songs I've posted on here that have gotten the most likes, are the ones I didn't like!)

Finrod
05 Aug 2019 11:17
In reply to Siling-La

Thanks for clarifying, but I feel like thats exactly what I understood the first time I read it, I just got a tidbit off.

Right here you state that "Yes, I'll admit that sometimes there is no difference, but most of the time, there is." But I don't understand where's your clarification and follow up after saying "there is"?

From what I gather in this first sentence you say no but also yes to my exact response, so what I'm hearing is you still believe otherwise, even after acknowledging my statement as true?

You're saying it's confusing because it was written with the flow of music? In that sentence you kind of just contradicted yourself, you already said it wasn't music. During the making of it you were inspired and believed it was music. Or "with the flow of music" So that makes it music? Because you thought it was?

This is getting a little too self indulging and it's really just what you see I guess. So I'm just gonna say you don't really have to go outta your way to say "this is music, this is not" in your blogs anymore. It's confusing and unnecessary when it comes to you putting how you yourself see things, just post the raw song lol!

SCREECHiNG FLARE
03 Aug 2019 22:32

I like this.
Why the downvotes though?

Gemini Guardian
03 Aug 2019 23:42
In reply to SCREECHiNG FLARE

i guess they didn't like this

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