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Jaylene: Chapter Three

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Avatar jaketheguy
10 Sep 2019 00:03
This is great!
Avatar oswaldo123
09 Sep 2019 19:36
Good stuff but chill on the 3k words mate
Avatar Rlad116
09 Sep 2019 22:19
In reply to oswaldo123
Yeah so what we agreed upon for the most part is that 3,000 words is ridiculous. We understand the reason for the length but the category is "short story" so please make is 1,000 - 1,250 words max. (This is still 2-3 regular pages worth) You can split into two separate blogs like a Chapter 3 (part 1) and part 2 if it's that long.

Thanks
Avatar Siling-La
10 Sep 2019 02:47
In reply to Rlad116
I once again respectfully request that I be allowed to stay at this rate until the series is over. Then, I will go back to the short, "boring" songs/poems.
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 23:22
In reply to Rlad116
😷😷😷
Avatar WahooWa123
09 Sep 2019 12:53
Abby's gonna run away with Kashi, I'm callin' it now
Avatar Gemini Guardian
09 Sep 2019 12:36
dang this is gooddd
Avatar Thi500
09 Sep 2019 04:30
when i said longer i didn’t mean this
Avatar WahooWa123
09 Sep 2019 12:52
In reply to Thi500
lolll
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 04:32
In reply to Thi500
Oh. So, is now a bad time to tell you that there will be 15 chapters?
Avatar banjo2
09 Sep 2019 13:12
In reply to Siling-La
He means, this long for 1 chapter.
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 13:41
In reply to banjo2
Don’t mean to be a massive hipster this time. (Or at least I’ll try not to) But there is zero harm in making it this long. I get it you admins don’t even read the blog and you want to scroll down quickly to downvote the blog. But like dang no harm no fowl. And tbf it is incredibly long for an “orthodox” chapter. But you can also say that every blog here is “too short” for a norm. It’s paint, and as long as it’s in the standard feature worthy code. I think it’s fine. I just don’t think you all need to peer pressure siling into doing something he doesn’t want to do, especially the fact that you guys aren’t even the main audience. Yes I know you didn’t read it. (Looking at rlad)
Avatar banjo2
09 Sep 2019 13:43
In reply to Finrod
I still like it, it's just a lengthy read. Like, attention spans, y'know. This is on a multi-use website, probably reading the blog between PM's or shouts.
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 13:50
In reply to banjo2
Do you really like it, if you’re gonna drop it halfway through? Okay I’m gonna keep this a hate free zone, but that seems like a huge logical fallacy right there.

Uhm your second sentence doesn’t really have any merit to me. Because I’ve never read a blog between PMs. That seems more like a you thing. And a personal impact rather then the open minded “administrator comments ” you guys are supposed to be sending.
Avatar Thi500
09 Sep 2019 18:42
In reply to Finrod
ok finrod
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 23:15
In reply to Thi500
So It's like THAT. Damn... sorry?😳
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 17:55
In reply to Finrod
I agree COMPLETELY with everything you said.
(Including that part about certain Admins who shall not be named being too lazy to read it in it's entirety, in order to reject and/or downvote it.)

Although, in all honesty, I'm kinda biased when it comes to this, as the 3rd Chapter of MoD (which Siling-La helped me to Write, BTW) is about as long as this, and even longer if you count that ridiculously long Glossary I left in the Comments.
(You're still right, though.)
Avatar banjo2
09 Sep 2019 13:52
In reply to Finrod
ok
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 13:46
In reply to banjo2
Jaylene was meant to be as long like a real book, so if you don't have the time to read it/lose interest, that's fine.
Avatar banjo2
09 Sep 2019 13:53
In reply to Siling-La
Alright, thank you.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 17:57
In reply to banjo2
Just thought I'd clarify, since I left that Reply to Finrod there.

Those "certain Admins" I was talking about, were neither you, nor Rlad.
(I'm pretty sure you know exactly who I'm talking about now, lol.)
Avatar banjo2
09 Sep 2019 18:04
In reply to Draconid_Jo
Mm'k.

And lemme clarify too, I'm not saying "shorter or no feature next time", just that shorter would be optimal for readers.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
10 Sep 2019 10:21
In reply to banjo2
Lol, I know.

I was talking about that certain other Admin (the one who isn't you, or Rlad, or Waldo), who may try to use the length of these Blogs (or of the Chapters of my MoD Series, the 3rd of which is about the same length as this, not counting the insanely long Glossary in the Comments) as an excuse to reject them.
(Hopefully, they won't, though.)
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 23:11
In reply to banjo2
I'm gonna try to connect with you to make this a bit more positive, and this for Thi too, cause I admit I've been sending some lengthy ass **** no one cares to even read. Let me just tell you: I ain't reading this damn story either, but what I'm really saying is why complain about it, when the only audience is people like Drac, who actually wants it for whatever reason he/they have??😂😂

It just seemed to me that a lot of you jumped on a train because Rlad said 1 thing. I've seen this in other blogs too. And I just felt like defending Siling, because he does a lot of weird things but this time. It's a bit over exaggerated.

Also inb4 I get an "ok" response. Since you guys can criticize others but not accept anything yourselves.
Avatar banjo2
10 Sep 2019 00:18
In reply to Finrod
I actually read the whole thing, liked it, and did think it was very long, thank u. I'm not the "this blog is prbly good lemme steal the feature b4 some1 else does" type. But I only jumped into the conversation itself because Rlad hadn't replied to Siling yet, at the time. Yes, I wouldn't've commented otherwise, but I wanted to give him his answer.

He/they? Ray cist.
Avatar Finrod
10 Sep 2019 13:53
In reply to banjo2
Wow a good admin, but you forgot that you admitted to reading blogs as a side thing in between PM’s etc. so no wonder you thought it was long. Because you want to jump between stories as if they were nothing.

You have a valid opinion. But it’s valid as a singular person, not a wide audience. because you purposely incorporated your own habits into it.

Appreciate you tho.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 18:07
In reply to banjo2
I know, it can be a bit intimidating to read something this long, especially if you're really busy and stuff.

I'm just really into Reading, and this sort of stuff is REALLY interesting to me.
(In other words, to me personally, longer is better, but I understand why a lot of people feel differently.)
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 23:34
In reply to Draconid_Jo
Oh! An actual audience member providing input ⬆️⬆️
Avatar Draconid_Jo
10 Sep 2019 10:23
In reply to Finrod
Lol, Thanks!
Avatar Rlad116
09 Sep 2019 23:33
In reply to Draconid_Jo
I just didn't feel as though responding was necessary. Trying not to make things unnecessary
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 13:37
In reply to banjo2
Ooooh...


But why? In a real book, this chapter would only be a few pages long.
Avatar Rlad116
09 Sep 2019 23:49
In reply to Siling-La
This would be exactly 22 pages long in a real book
Avatar Siling-La
10 Sep 2019 00:01
In reply to Rlad116
How many words per page are you talking?
Avatar Rlad116
10 Sep 2019 00:06
In reply to Siling-La
137 words on average, that's just with how your formating is. Nonetheless I understand our book section is no longer able to upload to but if you look in there if the chapters we longer they were still split up into parts
Avatar Siling-La
10 Sep 2019 00:10
In reply to Rlad116
I mean, I plan to literally make a copy of this as an actual book. Like y'know, print, bind, cover, share with friends...

So anyways, the amount of pages is irrelevant. I believe this chapter, as long as it is, is just as long as one in a chapter book.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
10 Sep 2019 10:25
In reply to Siling-La
I look forward to reading it some day.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 04:18
Very Exciting, Well-Written Story, and I REALLY look forward to reading the next Chapter!

BTW, I liked how the Equillians pronounced David and Abby's name differently.
(I think it was a neat idea.)
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 04:26
In reply to Draconid_Jo
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 04:35
In reply to Siling-La
Well, you did an amazing job, and came up with something REALLY original.

Although I did come up with some completely unique stuff for MoD, I still used mainly stuff that's already out there, like different things from the Bible, Norse Mythology, D&D, etc., and just combined them in an original way, whereas you pretty much started from scratch, which IMO, requires a lot more Creativity.
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 04:45
In reply to Draconid_Jo
Well, I've daydreamed about Equillia and Tartillia since I was eight. Equillia was just like a place I could retreat to in my mind and be whatever I wanted, no matter what anyone thought. I was always welcome there and everything was perfect. I won't speak about Tartillia right now because it would spoil future events. Anyways, over the years, these two civilizations became more and more complex in my head until they became what you are reading about right now. I don't think many people have done that. Anyways, that is why writing about it comes easy to me, and why this has turned out so well.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 04:50
In reply to Siling-La
Wow, we really are similar.

I've done the EXACT same thing, with many different Fantasy Worlds before, and when we were little, my Sister did, too.
(She grew out of it, though.)

I still Daydream of different Worlds to this day, and TBH, I'm convinced that every single one of them is real, out there somewhere, beyond our reach.
(Well, beyond the reach of our Physical Bodies, anyway, not our Minds, nor our Souls.)
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 04:51
In reply to Draconid_Jo
Well, I know that they aren't litteral places, but they exist in my mind, and that's good enough for me.
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 12:04
In reply to Siling-La
Yeah guys, it's called having an imagination xD yall are normal. Go write an OC page on your profiles or something. 😇
Avatar Draconid_Jo
09 Sep 2019 18:00
In reply to Finrod
Yeah, every time I hear the word "Imagination", I can't help but be reminded of that Quote I used for my Signature, lol!
(You're absolutely right, though.)
Avatar Rlad116
09 Sep 2019 03:36
Next time please make something of this length two separate blogs please.

Good read
Avatar Finrod
09 Sep 2019 12:01
In reply to Rlad116
Bish it's fine.😆
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 04:25
In reply to Rlad116
Okay, but may I ask why?
Avatar Rlad116
09 Sep 2019 16:10
In reply to Siling-La
I just accidentally deleted my commments.....

uhhhhh I said something along the lines that it was a suggestion not soemthing you have to follow.

We(admin) are discussing how we will administer these lengths of blogs in the future
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 23:42
In reply to Rlad116
The only problem is, I want it be this long, and I need it to be. I've got 15 chapters to do, and I'm just warning you now that these will not get any shorter. If I have to go on a pc myself and do it, so be it. Even if you blogmin reject it, I will still keep going and you can personally explain to my readers that you are the reason they can't see it.

I'm sorry I like writing, and blogmins don't like reading, but I really think that this is fine. If I'm not allowed to write less than normal sized chapters, then I don't know why there is an option for stories.

If you disagree with the length, just don't read it, and don't argue about this in my comments. There are some people that enjoy reading things this long, and if you guys want to reject something because it's too long for you, that is a personal opinion based judgement and should not be valid.
Avatar Draconid_Jo
10 Sep 2019 10:26
In reply to Siling-La
Well said!
Avatar Siling-La
09 Sep 2019 01:36
These just keep getting longer! lol

Anyways, I just want to thank oswaldo123 for helping me overcome the obstacle of a text limit, Draconid_jo for being an editor and providing moral support , and Bluedolphin for taking the time to help me make this enjoyable and mistakeless.

Without you three, this chapter would not be possible.
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