I stood there frozen. The rays of blindingly bright light made my eyes swell with agony.
I wanted to blink, I wanted to close my eyes and close hem forever. I wanted to slip into a deep never ending sleep.
But I wasn't in control of my body now. I tried to move my arms and legs, but my attempts were futile. I was a tin man in need of oiling but there was nothing that could help me now. Panic had overtaken my body and fear had spread through my mind. It was as if a parasite had taken over my body.
What was this light? Was it death? It must be death. I feel like I'm dying. What else could it be? And then I saw it. It wasn't death. Yet. It was the headlights from a car. My head filled with relief, I wasn't dying. I was going to live. I was going to see my family and friends again.
But something was still gnawing at the back of my mind. I couldn't work at what it was, too lost in the moment. Over joyed with glee that I would live. But it finally hit me.
Those were the headlights of a car and they were coming straight at me. Fear and panic took over my body and I was yet again and unoiled tin man.
I had not escaped death, I only mentally prolonged my life.
And now as the light I approached me...I blinked.
It's mostly pretty good. Grammar's acceptable, and the metaphors aren't bad either. However still a bit of tense-switching and some areas where words could be replaced with synonyms to avoid repetition.