I decline songs or poems about suicide every day. I would prefer to not have such depressing content featured. It is not a reflection on your talent as a writer in any way. There has just been too much on this topic lately.
I'm only talking about the words and the peom but I'm not giving my opinion on the meaning. the way you described some things were very well done. Again though, I think this sounds more like a poem or something then a song.
I like this one too I know its a song but I've felt just like that at times I've whated to do it and as colse to getting a knife to do so then i think about everyone thats been by me