Where are you?
I've searched in the valley
the hills and the cold.
Where are you?
I fell like the love I've heard about
is a scam that isn't true.
I doubt you exist
but I don't know where to turn
I've heard you're always there
But I doubt
But then I hear your voice
like a shadow in the night
Telling me I'm loved and that I'll always be alright.
How can you?
Don't you know I am a crook destined to lonesomeness
How can you?
Isn't there someone else worthy of all of this
I doubt you exist
but I don't know where to turn
I've heard you're always there
but I doubt
But then I hear your voice
like a shadow in the night
telling me I'm loved and that I'll always be alright
But I am a thief
I'm a lier
a cheat
not worthy of you
But I am a flea
in your power
in the presence of
the Almighty
I don't doubt you exist
But still its hard to turn to you
I know you'll always be here
because you exist
I hear your voice
like a shadow in the night
Telling me that I'm loved and that I'll always be alright
I hear your voice
like a lion too
Telling me I should stop and wait
because you've been running after me
I hear your voice
I hear your voice
But I doubt and I lie
I don't know how to try
I'm so heavy I cannot move my feet
But I feel like dirt
and I am filled with the hurt
of all those around me
But I hear your voice
Like a rushing wind
saying give it all and let me in
I hear your voice
and its in my heart
Telling me I don't have to restart
You're fine just the way that you are.
So listen to my voice
I'm all that you need
let me fill you with peace
Listen my Child
I love you, you're mine
and the only thing that could keep us apart
is you
The nice thing about ALL of your Poems, is that they are true.
The best Poems are always the most honest ones.
@Siling-La
16 Jul 2019 17:03
In reply to Draconid_Jo
Thank you, Draconid.
@Draconid_Jo
16 Jul 2019 17:37
In reply to Siling-La
YW.
Of course, I'm just being honest, too, lol!
@Siling-La
16 Jul 2019 17:50
In reply to Draconid_Jo
I do think that this one was too jumpy and inconsistent tho.
@Siling-La
16 Jul 2019 17:51
In reply to Siling-La
Its definetly not the best.
@Draconid_Jo
17 Jul 2019 01:11
In reply to Siling-La
Eh, IDK, I go mainly based on what you're actually saying, rather than any of that.
I assume these were meant as Song Lyrics?
If so, I'd have to hear it, before I could accurately evaluate how it sounds as a Song, but as a Poem, it seems good to me.
The same is true of most of my Lyrics.
Nobody can really tell what they'd sound like, as they can't actually hear them, like I do.
(Of course, unlike you, I don't really have any Musical Talent, and just write Lyrics for Video Game Music, lol!)
@Siling-La
17 Jul 2019 18:03
In reply to Draconid_Jo
This one started out as a song, but I decided to drop it because the beat was way to complicated to enjoy. So, this one is a poem.
@Draconid_Jo
17 Jul 2019 18:57
In reply to Siling-La